Friday, 17 February 2012

What You Left Behind...55Fiction#3

On nights like these, I wish you were by my side...
The world around me is still
All I wish to hear, is your heart beat,
Though it no longer does

In the darkness, I cry for you
I miss you, my love,
I miss our life together...

...Lonely nights are all you left behind



13 comments:

  1. So beautifully expressed in just 55 words the missing of loved one and how helpless one is against fate. Loved it Sweet. Keep it up. You are becoming better with each post. Loved it.

    Mumma

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    1. Thank you 'ma...I'll try to write up to your expectations in future too :*

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  2. same feeling on that particular day... so beautiful!! i miss you, my love... :)

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    1. Really? You felt that too?
      Thank you, Yuvva :)
      I miss you too:*

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  3. thank god,mai to sirf apne aap se hi pyaar krta hu :-B

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    1. Tu toh hai hi chor :D :p
      Phir bhi, thanks for reading my post :)

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  4. This one gripped me with emotion.. So very awesome just like your other posts.. ! Missing a loved one when you need them the most is a pain that cannot be put in words. Yet, you have done the very same in your words beaded so beautifully !

    You just keep getting better, don't you ?

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  5. Liked the post, it's full of pain,wchich only true love can bring.

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  6. Ammmm...May i know the location in the photograph ....

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    1. I wish I knew...I got it from Google :p

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  7. I've read 55 fiction in the last decade, but the gems which you, Dad and Amo have been churning out are in a different league altogether! Brilliant is what this post was... though it is open for interpretation, the gist is fixated on how we miss people dear to us when they're no longer within reach.
    Take a bow, Sweetu... love you!

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